AWL Highlighter -Academic vocabulary-

I tried to check how many academic vocabularies included in my first introduction.
By the AWL Highlighter, 12 words were defined as academic vocabularies.
And I noticed that the words 'media' is written for many times. Next time, I'll try to avoid using same words.

Introduction

-Over the past few decades, there has been a dramatic increase in opportunities to have contact with the media such as television and internet. Specifically, the number of people with internet has risen all over the world. The total number of people online in Europe has broken the 100 million mark (BBC, December 3rd 2004). On the one hand, it is widely believed that people can obtain huge information quickly through media. On the other hand, however, recent research has suggested that people especially children and teenagers tend to be controlled by media images. This sometimes leads to the negative impact on their behaviors and thoughts. The first section of this essay will give an overview of the benefits and drawbacks of the media effect on our lives. It will then go on to explain the importance of media literacy and argue that how we should manage the media information.